Angelic Artiaga

October23rd

80 Comments

Hard Candy

“Your last name sounds Italian.”
“It, is Italian.”
“Welcome to the family. I’m Italian.”
“Wonderful…”
“Yes. You taste wonderful.”
“And so do you.”

    From the moment the elevator door closed, he had been laying his eyes all over me. His eyes were feeling my thighs, my ass, my breasts, and my hair. They were taking me all in.
    Owning me.
    His emerald green eyes locked with mine. But only for a moment. I had turned away, tried to look coy. That’s when his hungry eyes returned to my mounds, found my ripe nipples. They were planning an escape through the tight fabric of my tight black dress.
    They were hard like grapes. Sweet and juicy.
    Like the night before Christmas. Visions of sugar plums danced in his head.
    I cleared my throat.

Made him read my nametag.
The tag read Miss Pomponio. Just then his eyes reached up and touched my plump lips. Tried to see past my soft lips. A moment later I rolled out my tongue. Tongue that was rolling around inside of my mouth, the tongue enjoying the flavor of hard candy, the hard candy he was dying to taste.
I slid my red tongue across my cushiony lips, like fluffing pillows, was patting them with my tongue like saying…come-here-boy.
So he did. Pressed his hard chest against my soft breast. But. I became the aggressor. I pulled him closer, leaned into him, and gave him a taste. By the time we had reached the Penthouse floor, my tongue was ready….
But the elevator door had opened.

80 Comments

  • Comment by Snoochie — November 3, 2009 @ 10:47 pm

    I was so into that — I loved it! I will read a few of the others.

  • Comment by keyton — November 4, 2009 @ 9:40 am

    wow……………hott

  • Comment by mercedes — November 4, 2009 @ 9:40 am

    i loved it….i love readin things that makes my imagination go wild….wow

  • Comment by William h swagspeare — November 4, 2009 @ 9:41 am

    Awwwwwww man. I want to be one of these dudes.

  • Comment by Kalla — November 4, 2009 @ 9:41 am

    I meant I love this work! It's Great and I want to read more!

  • Comment by Stela — November 4, 2009 @ 9:42 am

    this is so AWSOME!!
    lov it :)

  • Comment by Amickie — November 4, 2009 @ 9:42 am

    It was great! It leaves alot to the imagination, but enough to keep you guessing ….Keep up the Good Work! ;)

  • Comment by Cedity — November 4, 2009 @ 9:43 am

    This was very nice you go girl. Keep them coming.

  • Comment by urdreamgirl27 — November 4, 2009 @ 9:43 am

    wow i love it but im not getting the end was it imaginary or did that really happen at the end

  • Comment by Jay-Cro — November 4, 2009 @ 9:45 am

    thats very interesting, i ***** wit it

  • Comment by Schawn Penn — November 4, 2009 @ 9:48 am

    It has all the makings of a basic novel. what I wanna see is a classic. not saying that it's not good. But, I see the potential, so settle for better, Because it's not your best.

  • Comment by BossLadyShay — November 4, 2009 @ 9:51 am

    I Loved It !

  • Comment by Jay — November 4, 2009 @ 9:51 am

    Awesome…where's the rest?

  • Comment by Ky Blanchett — November 4, 2009 @ 9:52 am

    mmm..interesing?

  • Comment by ssSparkle — November 4, 2009 @ 9:52 am

    That was nice…I didn't want it to end :-)

  • Comment by Vandry — November 4, 2009 @ 9:52 am

    First point: awesome imagery

    Second point: a little repetitve, I would fund other words/synonyms and metaphors to make it less redundant (for example instead of sayin "his eyes" all the time refer to his eyes by an anatomical part of the eye that the reader will recognize like the
    pupil or cornea)

    Third point: I don't know if this is a clip from
    something else or what…if not I would make readers wait a little tiney bit more then get to the sexual references…like set up the attraction a little more first

    Fourth point: Love the dialogue at the beginning

    Fifth point: Love the pillow fluffing part

  • Comment by Ladii Goddiva — November 4, 2009 @ 9:53 am

    Not a dull moment……

    Follow me

    Twitter.com/ladiigoddiva

  • Comment by alright with me — November 4, 2009 @ 9:53 am

    that was a good story im like i wanted more

  • Comment by smileyriley3 — November 4, 2009 @ 9:54 am

    awesome. Definitely kept my attention and had me wanting more.

  • Comment by trini — November 4, 2009 @ 9:54 am

    thAt was great for wat it was. Altough I felt like I got teased I emailed you so that I can hopefully get a copy of the book. GREAT JOB!

  • Comment by Moulahh — November 4, 2009 @ 9:54 am

    niiice.!!

  • Comment by Anonymous — November 4, 2009 @ 9:55 am

    I loved it!fierce temptation!

  • Comment by Anthony — November 4, 2009 @ 9:55 am

    Wow this is amazing you had me from begging to end is this in print yet I would definately see myself reading this! Keep up the great work and good luck

  • Comment by Anonymous — November 4, 2009 @ 9:55 am

    very good, you kept my attention

  • Comment by Ed Magik — November 4, 2009 @ 9:56 am

    The storyline was good, but either I misread some sentences or there were a few lines that were incomplete sentences.

    Examples:
    "They were hard like grapes. Sweet and juicy."
    "Tried to see past my soft lips."

    Corrections:
    "They were hard like grapes, sweet and juicy."
    "They tried to see past my soft lips."

    Keep doing your thing. Do it to the fullest!
    –Ed Magik

  • Comment by toya — November 4, 2009 @ 9:56 am

    That was great!! When does this book hit the shelves??

  • Comment by Sarah — November 4, 2009 @ 9:57 am

    This was soooo sexy lolz …. I wish it would've continued

  • Comment by Anonymous — November 4, 2009 @ 9:57 am

    what;s next????close the door honey!!

  • Comment by fefefir4 — November 4, 2009 @ 9:57 am

    that was good….painted a sey picture!

  • Comment by diivaOnpOiint — November 4, 2009 @ 9:58 am

    lml i lik dat qOt me quessinq

  • Comment by Cianna — November 4, 2009 @ 9:58 am

    Waiting for what happens next…..

  • Comment by B-Jones — November 4, 2009 @ 9:58 am

    Had me curious as to what happens next,so I liked it!!! Great use of detail also!!!

  • Comment by Ejj — November 4, 2009 @ 9:59 am

    Fantastic!

  • Comment by Krystyle007 — November 4, 2009 @ 9:59 am

    Lovin this One. Let me know if have or going to have them in print. I know it would be a good read. I see myself cuddled up in front of my fireplace with a glass of wine, reading your work.

  • Comment by DIVA — November 4, 2009 @ 10:00 am

    HHEEEYYY!!!!!!! U did it again! Wheres the rest of it! LOL

  • Comment by m. jaela c. — November 4, 2009 @ 10:00 am

    lovin this short story….

  • Comment by kiispriceless — November 4, 2009 @ 10:00 am

    WOW…THAT'S HOTT!!! I actually started to feel my temperature rise!!! Very nice, sexxy and classy!!! 2 thumbs up!!!!

  • Comment by Cassie — November 4, 2009 @ 10:01 am

    I was all in to it…..thought it was about to go down on that elevator!!!!

  • Comment by Syl — November 4, 2009 @ 10:01 am

    Very good, I enjoyed the short monologue. Thank you for sharing.

  • Comment by texxaspeach87 — November 4, 2009 @ 10:01 am

    wow…very descriptive and interesting…i want to read more!where's the rest??? lol :-)

  • Comment by CED — November 4, 2009 @ 10:02 am

    Very nice touch.
    Nicely done.
    Great suspense.

  • Comment by Swizzy917 — November 4, 2009 @ 10:02 am

    I likeyy. Ummmmm why da door had 2 open?

  • Comment by jergrif73 — November 4, 2009 @ 10:02 am

    I am always down for very descriptive visuals….great job…

  • Comment by Jazmine — November 4, 2009 @ 10:03 am

    aw suki suki then lol. kudos

  • Comment by debzrockz — November 4, 2009 @ 10:04 am

    Nice…. I likes ")

  • Comment by Kim — November 4, 2009 @ 10:04 am

    Wow!! Whew!!! More please!!

  • Comment by JUREES SO FLY — November 4, 2009 @ 10:05 am

    hahaha but the elevator door had opend . OH WOW!! KUDOS TO YOU

  • Comment by Blaze Adams — November 4, 2009 @ 10:05 am

    Damn! What time are you coming over??? LOL!

  • Comment by 1_ladycakes — November 4, 2009 @ 10:06 am

    I love that hard candy. Great story :) pls tweet when you post the next story :)

  • Comment by MrsAmeryca — November 4, 2009 @ 10:06 am

    DAMN! I came. good enough for me.

  • Comment by Stacie — November 4, 2009 @ 10:06 am

    Pretty cool, I like it!

  • Comment by Mercedes — November 4, 2009 @ 10:07 am

    Luv it! Can't wait 2 read more…

  • Comment by Kaindeed — November 4, 2009 @ 10:07 am

    Really good! Impressive use of words!

  • Comment by Keith Jones — November 4, 2009 @ 10:08 am

    Wow impressive build up, great use of words.

  • Comment by Dashary — November 4, 2009 @ 10:08 am

    Nice, love it.

  • Comment by Racquel — November 4, 2009 @ 10:08 am

    Dashary

  • Comment by ricky — November 4, 2009 @ 10:08 am

    love it…awesome description made me feel real…sexy and not too pornographic

  • Comment by mikaela — November 4, 2009 @ 10:09 am

    pretty good. you should carry it on.

  • Comment by Giova — November 4, 2009 @ 10:09 am

    Nice!! very visual..good stuff!

  • Comment by Courtney — November 4, 2009 @ 10:09 am

    very nice, I felt like I was in the elevator watching! lol

  • Comment by ChiWhi — November 4, 2009 @ 10:10 am

    Thats good. What is this from? Really able to feel and visualize what is going on through your words…

  • Comment by wifeofscams — November 4, 2009 @ 10:10 am

    The action, planned and imagined was good, visual imagary, but come on , far too many descriptive words. Keep it simple keep it sweet. Debs

  • Comment by Chris — November 4, 2009 @ 10:10 am

    Speechless, it was so visual. I had no sense of what was goin on around me while i was reading it. Keep up the good work.

  • Comment by Olivia — November 4, 2009 @ 10:11 am

    I like these kind of stories.

  • Comment by amelia — November 4, 2009 @ 10:11 am

    love it…wanna read more!!!

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:14 am

    Wowzers MrsAmeryca!
    I love it! Read it again! Do it again! Welcome and stay. Make sure you tell all of your friends about your new hangout. Tell them to come and hang out too.
    Chow.
    Angelic

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:14 am

    Jazmine!
    Aw suki suki… I like that… Can I have it? Lol. Welcome girl and stay. Make sure you tell all of your friends to come and play with us too! Aw sucki sucki… I love it!
    Chow.
    Angelic

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:15 am

    Jergrif73,
    I think I’m going to make descriptive is my middle name and visuals is my last now that you’ve said that. Thanks for the love and I look forward to seeing you here all of the time. Make sure you tell all of your friends to come and hang out with us.
    Until later,
    Auviour… Angelic

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:15 am

    Ha ha ha ha Swizzy917!
    I know huh? That’s what I said! When I was writing this quickie and the door opened in my mind, I snapped my fingers and said, “Damn!” lol…
    Welcome and stay for more okay Swizzy. This place is going to be a blast. Tell all of your friends to come by and play with us.
    Auviour… Angelic

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:15 am

    Thanks CED! I love that you enjoyed the nice touch and great suspense. Welcome and stay for more stories. Remember to tell all of your friends that you have a new spot to hang out and that they should do the same…
    Chow.
    Angelic

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:16 am

    Hey Krystyle007,
    Thanks for your comment! Yes these will be in print. I will not be posting all that will be published but I will be posting a lot. Probably about 2 or 3 per week. You have stay with me and everybody else here on this site. Send me an email at angelicartiaga@gmail.com and I will make sure you get a copy of the book.
    Muah! Angelic.

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:16 am

    Why thank you Vandry,
    I am always looking for pointers. It always helps me out. I will take into consideration what you are suggesting. I would also like to return the favor.
    repetetive is spelled repetitive.
    I would find (not fund)
    sayin is spelled saying
    tiney is spelled tiny.
    I love reading all my post and always have a great time responding to them as well.
    So, Vandry… Welcome and Stay and tell all of your friends to do the same… BTW I like the pillow fluffing part too. Muah!
    Until next time Auviour, Angelic.

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:17 am

    Awww ssSparkle,
    Don’t go anywhere. I promise there will be more to come..
    Welcome and Stay and Tell all of your friends to do the same.
    Chow Angelic

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:18 am

    Hey Jay!
    Well, the rest is up to you for now I must say. I want you to tell me what you think happened next…
    Muah! Angelic

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:18 am

    Thanks BossLadyShay.
    Welcome and Stay…
    Tell all of your friends to do the same…
    Auviour Angelic.

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:19 am

    It’s just my imagination… The real end belongs to you…
    Tell me what you want it to be.
    Tell all of your friends that I want them to come and hang out with us too.
    Auviour Angelic.

  • Comment by angelicauthor — November 4, 2009 @ 10:18 am

    You are right Schawn Penn. Funny but true. These short stories have no part in novels…
    That’s what I love about short stories…
    They are just little tales for brief entertainment… I would love for you to read my novel… It is better than FANTASTIC….
    Welcome and Stay… Angelic

  • Comment by nintendost — November 17, 2009 @ 7:50 am

    Article very interesting, I will necessarily add it in the selected works and I will visit this site

  • Comment by camery — December 16, 2009 @ 6:14 pm

    lol i like this one. you always leave me guessing. i CANT wait till your book comes out

  • Comment by Robin Robinson — June 6, 2010 @ 6:17 pm

    Wow that was awesome!!! I was able to visualize what was going on through your words…

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